Second Draft of The Wrong Turn

This is the second draft of my film The Wrong Turn, I still have parts of my film missing as I wanted to have a voiceover at the start of the film and I have filmed two versions but these do not fit in with what I want my film to achieve and I need to re-do these for the final draft of my film.

Changes I have made to my second draft while editing was when Alice is about to walk into the kitchen I made this fade to a red to show that she is going into a danger zone to show the audience that something bad will happen here later. I like this effect and think it works well with my film although the quality of the camera is not that great and I will re-shoot this to improve on the impact on which this has on the audience.

To improve my film further I will re-shoot when Alice is walking through the living room and up the stairs of her house, as I filmed these parts on different days the lighting is different and this is really recognisable this therefore doesn't look professional and needs to be re-shot

I am also going to make slight changes to the ending as the end speach between Alice and Becky is very un-realistic and will be better if it ends as Alice is running as this will leave the opening sequence on more of a cliff hanger and the audience will want to carry on asking questions as this will leave a larger impact on the audience.

Changes to the Second Draft of The Wrong Turn

Costume Change

Changes I will make to the second draft of my film is the costume of Becky so the continuity is correct. As I am going to change the shot of were Becky and Alice meets, as usually Becky walks out of her house to meet Alice, but as I have had to use two separate houses to achieve this, as Alice walks away she does not walk to the correct house and therefore the continuity is not correct, so to change this I am going to have Becky walking through the street and then sees Alice rather than her walking out of her house. Therefore instead of Becky wearing a jumper, she is going to be wearing a jumper, coat and scarf as this is more natural for someone waking down a street.

A Voice Over

I am going to use a voice over at the start of my film when Alice is driving, to explain her past life and why she is moving to her new house; as this will explain the story more as of yet it is not 100% visible that she is moving into a new house.

Flashbacks

After my first draft of my film I have decided to add flashbacks of the protagonists (Alice) past life as this along with the voice over at the start of the film will explain the story line of her past life more and these shots will fit with the codes and conventions of a thriller genre as I will use the double exposure over them to make them look slightly distorted as well as making them black and white to ensure the audience knows that these are flashback. The first flashback I will use is:

 · The first flashback will be of Alice as she has just moved into her house and walks through the living room into the kitchen and then looks outside, this is when I will play the flashback of Alice sitting at a desk surrounded by papers around her, she will then look stressed and annoyed and throw all of them onto the floor.

 

· The second flashback I will use is of Alice looking at the camera screaming and shouting as someone is pulling her down the stairs. This will be played when Alice hears a noise from her bedroom and starts to walk down the stairs of her house. I will play the flashback as she is halfway down the stairs, and I will then carry on playing the shot of Alice walking down the rest of the stairs.

 

 

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First Draft of The Wrong Turn

First Draft of The Wrong Turn

Firstly I want there to be a voice over at the beginning of the opening sequence to explain to the audience that Alice is just moving into the house and this is the first time she has been in the house for the first time. As I don’t think you can tell this from the opening sequence.

Re-Shooting

Shot 4 this is where Alice is getting out of her car and is going in the boot of her car to get her suitcases out. To reduce the length of this shot as it drags on and I think the audience will get bored as they are watching it, instead of this I will use various types of shots for example I will use a close up of her feet when she is getting out of the car, and a close up of her keys when locking the car door.

Shot 8&9 as this is quite jumpy when we see Becky walking out of her house to meet Alice. As we first see Becky walking out of her house and then we see her walking over to Alice but we never see her walking up to Alice, we just see her in the next shot talking to her, therefore this needs to be re-done. There are also continuity problems when we see Alice waking away from Becky heading in the direction to go into her house; as we never see Alice walk up to the door of her house we only see her opening the door in the next shot, therefore I will re-shoot this to resolve the continuity problems.

Shot 20&21 as it is quite dark and therefore the picture looks bad quality and I need to re-shoot this to solve this problem.

Shot 23&24 is bad continuity to the lack of natural lighting in the room and jumps as Alice is walking through the living room.

Shot 27&28 on this shot we do not see Alice walking through her living room door to head up the stairs we only see her walking up the stairs so therefore the continuity in this shot needs to be improved.

Shot 29 as Alice has just walked up the stairs and looks over the banister the shot is too short and does not create the same effect as it would if it was longer.

Shot 35&36&37 between shot 36 and 37 the continuity is not correct as of the way she stands up from having been sat down, as in this shot Alice does not look scared enough after having heard this noise and therefore neither does the audience, so I will re-shoot this to create more tension as Alice goes and investigates the noise she has just heard.

Shot 43 after this shot when Alice is walking around the living room I have diegetic sound playing to scare the audience and to make them tense of what is going to happen next. But here I am going to re-shoot and make Alice look around the living room and kitchen so she looks like she is looking worried and looking were the noise has come from.

I will also have flashbacks shown at various points in the film of Alice in her past, this is so the audience can see more of the protagonists past and know what she has gone through and feel more symathetic towards her. This will also add to the thriller codes and conventions.

I am going to re-shoot the end speech between Alice and Becky as it is quite dark and has too many shots of them together where I want them to be close-ups, so the audience can relate to the characters more.

Health and Safety Risk Assessment

Hazards	Who is at risk?	Controls	Severity of Injury	Chance of Injury	Risk	Control Measures
Falling objects and equipment	Cast that is at ground level	Secure equipment e.g. tripods	Serious	Low	Low	All loose equipment will be stored correctly and safely.
Actors falling down the stairs	Cast member that runs up and down the stairs	Walking down the stairs carefully and looking were they are going	Serious	High	Low	Cast member that is walking down the stairs walks carefully to ensure she doesn’t fall over.
Actor driving the car	Actor who is driving the car and pedestrians crossing the road and that are around the street	Tell the actor not to focus on the camera and solely focus on the driving	Very Serious	High	High	Other members of the cast looks around and ensures there isn’t people walking around before the car starts to move.

Weekly Post

I have decided this week when finishing the first draft of my film, The Wrong Turn I am going to show flaskbacks throughout my film. I have decided to do this to use more of the horror codes and conventions and make the storyline of my film progress in the opening sequence, this is so the audience will know more about the protagonist, her past life and why she has moved away.

Possible Music for The Wrong Turn

Possible sounds effects and music that I could have throughout my film is:

The 28 weeks later famous music. I could use this when Alice has just heard the noise from her bedroom and walks down the stairs as it is tense music which is leading to something bad happening.



The Inception main theme tune; I am going to play this underneath the voice over from Alice as she is driving to her house, as it is quite calm but you can tell that there is something behind the music.



The first 30 seconds of The Dark Knight Rises soundtrack, I could play this when Alice is running through the street after seeing someone in her garden.

Shooting Schedule

Week Start	Monday	Tuesday	Wednesday	Thursday	Friday	Saturday	Sunday
29th October	Shoot scenes  1-10   Shoot outside of house                 11am- 1am 2 hours	Shoot scenes 10-25   Shots are changing from one side of the street to the other           12pm- 2pm 2 hours	Shoot scenes 26-58     All shots to be shot  inside of the house               11am- 3 pm 3 hours	Shoot scenes 59- 72   Shooting outside of ALICE’S house Using steady cam as walking across the street   11am- 1pm 2 hours
5th November		Shoot shots 70- 90 all at college       4pm- 5:30pm 1 hour 30 minutes	Look through all of shots and see which need re-shooting   10:30pm- 1pm 2 hours 30 minutes			Re-shoot shots           12pm- 2pm	Re-shoot           2pm- 4pm
12th November		Look through re-shoots           10pm-11pm 1 hour		Name all of shots and organise which I will use and will not use   2 hours
19th November						Re-shoot if needed     11am- 2pm 3 hours	Re-shoot if needed     3pm- 6pm 3 hours
26th November	FILMING COMPLETE	Put final shots on to edit suite computers		Editing starts
3rd December	Editing		Editing	Editing
10th December	Editing		Editing	Editing

Storyboard

 

When looking at my storyboard as a whole, I realise that I have a lot of shots which are repeated and this may look quite repetitive when filming, this is something I will look at when I am shooting. But I think all of the other shots will work well together.